You’ve polished your resume to no end, especially after finding a great job posting that seems tailor-made for your leadership skills. But did your cover letter merit the same attention?
Many hiring managers use your cover letter to gauge your interest in the company, as well as to measure your aptitude for the job.
Therefore, when you resort to “Dear Sir, I’m interested in your open job, here’s my resume,” you’re missing out on a critical chance to persuade employers to take you seriously for an executive or leadership role.
Here are 5 of the most crucial mistakes made in cover letters—including those that can quickly knock you out of the running for a leadership job:
1 – Your opening line was boring.
“I am an Operations Director with 18 years of experience” or “In response to your ad for a CEO, I have enclosed my resume” really aren’t compelling enough to use as opening statements.
Instead, try a hook that makes the hiring manager sit up straight in his or her chair, as in these examples:
“Would a Sales Vice President who consistently pushes teams past quota (up to 52%) make a difference in your national rankings?”
“As a CIO for global company ABC Consulting, I’ve increased customer satisfaction to 97% in 3 outsourcing engagements—pushing our revenue growth to its peak despite the recession. I’m interested in creating the same results for you.”
The idea is to speak precisely to the employer’s pain points, while describing the performance impact you’ve had in previous roles.
Note that each of these sentences contains metrics, a targeted job title, and a career-defining achievement that is framed in context and laid out quickly for the reader to absorb.
Your opening line should also leverage the research you’ve done on the company, per the next point.
2 – You didn’t demonstrate the ability to solve the employer’s problems.
Rattling off a list of competencies isn’t strong enough to distinguish you from other candidates, but speaking directly to the company’s needs will do the trick.
You have to dig into the company’s history, press releases, annual reports, and other news to figure out their pain points.
What type of expansion is planned? Were earnings down in previous quarters? What do industry analysts say about the company’s future and their business strategy?
Armed with this information, you’re able to connect your leadership skills to the employer’s needs much more succinctly:
“My ability to produce business development results (30% rise in cloud-based solution sales during Q4 2010) can address any struggles you’ve had in breaking into this market. Can we talk?”
3 – Your key points don’t match (or exceed) the job requirements.
Like resumes, cover letters must be precise and direct the reader… keeping them attentive to the reasons they should hire you and the edge your work can give them.
While you’re writing, put the job description in front of you to remind yourself what the employer is seeking. Then, look for ways to point out how you can surpass these expectations.
The following example is taken from an IT Director cover letter:
“Your ad noted that you require a leader in service delivery and customer satisfaction. My career includes 3 years of 97% satisfaction ratings, achieved by improving infrastructure and network capacity, and I hold responsive service as my #1 priority.”
4 – You didn’t address the letter to an actual person.
Finding a contact name inside the company has never been easier. First, you can use LinkedIn’s Advanced People Search function to put in the employer name, then fill in the Keywords box to find potential contacts.
For example, a Business Development Manager might look for keywords such as “VP Sales or COO” to identify the next-level manager contact, while an IT Product Director can try to find the CIO’s name.
If you don’t find a name through LinkedIn, be sure to check Zoominfo.com, Spoke.com, or the company About Us page.
If you have access to Hoover’s database or Dun & Bradstreet, you can also use these resources to locate company insiders. In addition, ReferenceUSA.com is a free contact name database available through many public libraries, and requires only your library card for access.
Taking the time to locate a name (vs. resorting to “Dear Hiring Manager”) will help your letter create lasting impact with target employers.
5 – You forgot to be assertive.
Especially if you’re pursuing an executive or senior-level role, employers like to see a take-charge style (the same one you’ll use to deal with vendors or your new team). If your closing line isn’t strong, you run the risk of looking too passive.
“Thank you in advance for reviewing my credentials” is certainly polite and professionally stated.
However, “I look forward to describing how I plan to exceed your requirements as Vice President of Finance” and “Offer me a personal interview, and I will share how my leadership as CIO will impact your IT organization” are both stronger.
Even more intense, “I will follow up with you next Tuesday” shows definite intent on your part to influence the hiring audience, and gives them advance notice of the proactive steps you’ll take to secure the interview.
To summarize, there’s no reason to settle for a bland, one-size-fits-all cover letter that blends in with the others.
Your job search will fare better when you zero in on the hiring audience with an unforgettable opening—especially when it draws a parallel between employer needs and your unique value.
Guest Post by: Executive resume expert Laura Smith-Proulx an award-winning Executive Resume Writer and former recruiter with a 98% success rate opening doors to prestigious jobs through personal branding. The Executive Director of An Expert Resume, she partners exclusively with CIO, CTO, COO, CEO, CFO, SVP, VP, and Director candidates.
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Jessica Hernandez, President, CEO & Founder of Great Resumes Fast
Hi, I’m Jessica. I started this company back in 2008 after more than a decade directing hiring practices at Fortune 500 companies.
What started as a side hustle (before that was even a word!) helping friends of friends with their resumes has now grown into a company that serves hundreds of happy clients a year. But the personal touch? I’ve kept that.
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